This came to me yesterday, and I like it. A fare-thee-well to a tough month.
April
The mist has an edge.
The anarchist's knife hides
in a black overcoat.
And before there's any moaning about 5-7-5 nonsense, that's not how it's done in japanese. And it's 17 syllables, and prettier this way.
So, just wanted to share. Anytime I get a poem in the middle of a thunderstorm, I feel it needs to be aired.
Jack
1 comment:
I really like that. It's really got...well an edge to it, not to state the obvious. I really like haikus, but they're like short stories - fairly easy to write a decent one, really damn hard to write a good one. But I think you grabbed a good image here.
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